I like where you were going with teh grading but it seemed a little bit over-saturated.
was there an earthquake going on the entire time you were shooting?
and when you did that swift zoom im pretty sure oyu had autofocus on your camera. thats definitely a no no.
it seems like you get your roots from photography, so learn more about editing. your transitions were jumpy and didnt make sense.
after effects is great! check out www.videocopilot.net
for invaluable tutorials
if you can, "commandeer" yourself a copy of adobe premiere (its very easy to do) so you can lose movie maker's bs
hopefully you get something from this.
also, youre white appeared to be correct most of the time, but make sure you ALWAYS white balance when you change lighting.